FuR VisualPoem from Kapaa Middle School MEDIA on Vimeo.
My Visual Poem is about the Ocean Life and what its like if you live that life everyday, and these clips of the ocean can pretty much represent the cause of action. Some of these clips mostly have waves washing in , from my point of view, those waves seem to be trying to pull me into this type of life, they've gladly succeeded.
My Visual Poems' special effects affected the whole meaning because most of my affects have a "open up" or a "look into" feeling in them. In that case it perfectly fits this projects main idea because the whole purpose is to look into the ocean and see what kind of life lies beneath it.
I feel that my Visual Poem could have been improved by better footage and less camera movement. I should've started earlier on this assignment and should've put more thought into it.
For your visual poem, I really liked your transitions. However, I think you could have lowered the natural sounds so we could hear your poem better. Nice visual poem, great effects!
ReplyDeleteThe transitions were a nice touch to the poem.
ReplyDeleteThe wind noise was a little loud.
Even with the wind going on, I could still understand what you were saying, so good job on being clear!
I liked how there were a lot of cool ocean shots.
ReplyDeleteThough the background noise is nice, it's a little too loud.
All the transitions were pretty cool and eye catching.
You had really good visuals of the water and the shots were clear.
ReplyDeleteThe audio was a bit hard to understand so I couldn't tell what you were saying in the beginning.
I liked the transitions that you put in, it made the clips smoother.
I think you had a good B-Roll layer, and other than the camera being kinda shaky, it was good.
ReplyDeleteI think you could've improved the audio or added better effects, and made it longer.
I liked your poem a lot, and I liked the final transition out.
I like the transitions after every sequence. The natural sound for me was to over powering cause I could not hear your voice that well. I really liked your opening screen of your poem title and who's it by.
ReplyDeleteThe visuals of the ocean were well shot and looked nice. The sound of the ocean overcomes your voice, you could probably lower the volume of the ocean. I liked the transition you used in your video, it looked like a wave, it matches your poem and visuals.
ReplyDeleteThe first thing that I noticed that was really well done was the transitions. These transitions really helped the visuals to flow better, and I thought that it matched the theme; ocean life. One thing that could be improved is the audio, as the background noise was a bit loud and I couldn't really hear the actual poem. However, despite that, the background noise was definitely really cool and relevant, so if the audio levels for that were just turned down a bit, it would be perfect.
ReplyDeleteI like the beginning opening with the ocean life title. I also like the b-roll and how it is relative to the ocean. Something that you could of improved on would be the natural sound volume because i can barely hear you talking with all the natural sound in the background. Lastly i like you transitions from one b-roll to another. Awesome job Russell!
ReplyDeleteI think the sound bite of the ocean was really good to add in there. It would be nice if I could hear you better its unclear what you are saying. Nice b-roll of the ocean and it matched what you were saying.
ReplyDeleteGreat B-role and clear shots.
ReplyDeleteBackground natural sounds were way to loud and I could barely hear your poem.
Shots were still, and there was nice sequencing.
I really liked how you added a lot of nice shots of the beach.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you put the natural sounds of the beach, but it may be a little too loud.
I also liked how you added an opening and transitions.
1.) I liked your different camera shots and angles, they really added to your video.
ReplyDelete2.) I think that you could have lowered the volume of the waves crashing and increased the volume of your poem.
3.) Overall I think your Visual Poem had a great end result.
I liked how you got different angles on all the different things that you filmed. The voice over was a little hard to hear and understand. You used a lot of transitions which I thought was good.
ReplyDeleteThere were a lot of nice B-roll shots. The voice over was hard to hear because of the Natural sounds. The transitions matched and looked nice.
ReplyDeleteHey Russell! Awesome video. I really liked the B-Roll shots because it relates to your poem nicely and there were some great shots!
ReplyDeleteI think you could have lower down the B-roll audio because it was hard to hear your actual voice however, I liked how you wanted natural sounds to be included in your video. Neat touch. Also, your voice was very loud and clear!
Great work Russell!
I love your b-roll! It reflects well with what your saying. But you could have adjusted your audio so you could hear what your saying. What I really liked about your poem was that it had nice edits that worked really well with your poem... Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used natural sounds that matched your poem. I think that the background sounds overpowered your voice so it was hard to hear. I thought that the poem had good and applicable b-roll.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you showed the waves crashing onto the sand and made the visuals match your poem. I think that you could've lowered the volume on the natural sound or if it was wind from the voiceover then maybe you could've re-filmed it. I also liked how you used digital effects and also showed emotion in the voiceover.
ReplyDeleteThere were a lot of good special effects.
ReplyDeleteB-roll was louder than the A-roll.
I still enjoyed the poem itself.
Awesome job Russel! There could have been a tone down on the background noises (the ocean waves sounds); I couldn't really hear the poem well. But still, the B-Roll was amazing, especially with the angles.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your visuals of the ocean and the waves. The natural sound in the video was distracting, which made it hard to hear your poem. Lastly, your transitions were nice and helped make the story flow well.
ReplyDeleteGreat Job Russell.
ReplyDeleteI think to make the video poem even greater is to lower the background noises to where you can understand the voice over and as well hear the background noises.
I love how close you got to the water and the different composition techniques with the visual.